Thursday 26 May 2016

100wcweek#19

I was looking at the lighthouse from whit rock beach. I heard it used a mega sized candle. As I was watching I noticed that the flame flickered then went out. I wonder what was happening down there. I was too far away to walk so I decided to drive. When I got there I walked all the way up. when I got to the top I looked at the candle and there was some sort of animal chewing away at the candle. I looked at me and I ran. I jumped into the car and drove off. I never went near that lighthouse ever again.
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4 comments:

  1. SoccerLover26 May 2016 at 09:19

    Ok, your story is a it confusing. Your last sentences don't make much sense. Also, the prompt should be ' as the flame flickered and then went out' so you should change that part. Great start!

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  2. Unknown26 May 2016 at 09:24

    Its white not wit and light house are not run by candle there run by a light if it's fire then it's burning down but good story

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  3. jjmonkey26 May 2016 at 09:31

    You spelt white wrong in your first sentence and i think you mean't it looked at me and i ran away but good start :)

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  4. Negative Zero26 May 2016 at 18:20

    Always be careful with your spelling and punctuations. For your first sentence, I think you mean white instead of whit. I think you used too many I's on your story. Maybe you could start off your story with a stronger beginning but you did great on your story.

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